IELTS General Writing Task 2

IELTS writing tasks' topics, answers, and comments.

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By Abdullah Hassan, 2017-12-03  
Band: NA (Total words: 262)
Comment:
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest to use a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Suggest to refine coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
 IELTS General Writing Task 2 - Topic, Answer, and Comment
In many countries the level of crime is increasing and crimes are becoming more violent.

Why do you think this is and what can be done about it?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience.

Write at least 250 words.
Crime isn't new of modern society and no one knows when it actually started. The sad fact is that crime rate is increasing in recent decades, and killing, stealing, robbing, kidnapping, violent crimes are more than before. Actually, there are many reasons for that awful and miserable phenomenon.

Some people always look at other peoples' properties and not pleased with what they have. And that, of course, leads to hatred and then lead to misdeeds. Moreover, some people are psychiatric disordered and which in turn leads to violence. Another thing that we should take care of is the lack of necessary money; many criminals would not have become criminals if they had had enough money and other daily needs for themselves and their families. Now it is the time to raise an important question: ‘do all the previous reasons give you the right to be a criminal? The answer comes immediately: of course not, even if you don't have a cent in your pocket.

Another important question is: What is the solution of this heinous situation? How can we overcome crime in our society? In my opinion, it's the responsibility of both the government and individuals. In fact, most of the burden is on the government and they alone cannot eliminate crime from a country. It's very important to reinforce the policemen with the latest equipment and set firmer laws to prevent criminals from thinking of crimes.

And for individuals, which includes people like you and me, we should help the needy, not only with money but also psychological help and support.