IELTS General Writing Task 2

IELTS writing tasks' topics, answers, and comments.

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By Kiran, 2018-12-20  
Band: NA (Total words: 433)
Comment:
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(12) MORE(12) SUCCESSFUL(8); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 2 as start point.
  • Suggest to use a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
 IELTS General Writing Task 2 - Topic, Answer, and Comment
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Only people who earn a lot of money are successful.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

You should write at least 250 words.
In general , success comes through the effort , which identifies and rely on particular task to overcome and face the challenging circumstances according to the situation.Undoubtedly people have more conviction and control over the life,It means that people are only successful who earn the huge amount , In my opinion successful means not a rupee to lead the life in constant way ,but people are more successful within the prescribed way to make happiness with the family or friends, so I would totally disagree with the statement because , everyone success does not depend on the rupee.
According the general demographic statistics population rate is more in the country,for example in India population plays an important role in the country development,but people may be rich or poor.constantly,it depends on the skills and the attitude of the person to behave in the polite or rude.eventually successful persons are not happy with their personal life because they are more independent and thought cannot levels the person attention.Many individuals are most attitude of monopoly caders.They always be more convicted to their work but not through the personal and humanity ways.
In addition, money makes life easy not more comfortable,for example, if a film celebrity is more successful in his life around and he earns a lot more money to lead the life but he never moves out of box that ,he never behave like a normal person to wander around the streets or valley's or some commercial parts, so never enjoys his life smoothly,always be pretend by some protocols that is the word celebrity.
Apparently, business people are more busy and has the hectic schedule,they lead the money on finger tips and earns more than anyone ,in the competitive world.This type of people more successful but time takes them to think the business to double but not make him happy through spending with the personal ones.in case that normal persons more happy with Personel and work life, because they never opt for higher things and keep everyone happy, makes smiles on cheeks, these may leads to successful person without a huge earnings.
To conclude, people never intended to earn lot of money to make them successful,but they are living and looking for an opportunity to make everyone cheers that makes successful.