Some students take one year off between finishing high school and going to university to travel or work. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

IELTS Writing Task 2 & Answer

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #2037
Question:
Some students take one year off between finishing high school and going to university, in order to travel or to work. Do you think advantages outweigh disadvantages?
Answer Hints:
Advantages and disadvantages question, analyze pros and cons. Supporting the argument is relatively easy to write. The key point to discuss is "take a one-year break after high school to travel or work."

Prons
  • Increase practical experience, know your own shortcomings.
  • Learn more purposefully to get better results.
  • Learn economic independence, financial management
  • Cherish opportunities of future studying in colleges
  • Acquire skills and experience that cannot be obtained in the classroom
  • Learn wider world outside the classroom and consider a career path
Cons
  • After working and traveling for a year, they possibly no longer adapt to the school environment.
  • Loses interest in higher education as well as opportunities for life development
Answer 1
In certain nations, youngsters are motivated to take a gap of one year either to do work or travel after completion of secondary studies and before entering in tertiary studies. In the following paragraphs, I will explain the merits and demerits of taking a one year break before pursuing college.
To embark on, ...
By nancy sachdeva, 2020-07-31  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 302
Band: 5.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident; however, the answer lacks contextualization, and cohesion within sentences is sometimes faulty.
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Lexical Resources:
-Some spelling errors are noted; the essay's vocabulary is too plain.
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Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical errors are frequent, such as article (a, an, the).
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-Grammatical errors are frequent, such as nouns (singular, plural).
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Answer 2
Most of the countries encourage youths to work or explore for a year before starting their higher studies. Nowadays, after schooling, students get enough time to make a schedule for their future, apart from that the best way to enhance themselves is travelling to different parts of the country and also at the same time ...
By swathi, 2020-08-12  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 288
Band: 5.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok, but the ideas for disadvantages is limited.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generlly arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is limited, but just about adequate for the task, try to enhance IELTS vocabulary.
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Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and although wordy, they rarely reduce communication.
Answer 3
Education and experience are different levels of knowledge gaining steps. It is very wise and interesting to make young people work after high school. I see this mostly happens in almost all countries over the world, which can occur in different situations or stages in a person's life.
Working after high school is ...
By Nirmala, 2020-08-07  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 390
Band: 5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-Off-topic a little, the raters may doubt the essay is memorized, please prepare topics (not essays) in advance.
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Task Response:
-Only partially address the prompt, you missed the "disadvantages"
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident; however, the answer lacks contextualization, and cohesion within sentences is sometimes faulty.
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Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical errors are frequent, such as nouns (singular, plural).
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Answer 4
In some countries young people are prefer to work or to go aboard between high school and college educations. Sometimes this situation have advantages as well as disadvantages....
By Lieki Yasimy, 2017-10-24  View full answer
Total words: 303
Band: NA
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(8) THEY(7) THEIR(6); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Suggest to use a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Conclusion seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Suggest to refine coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
Answer 5
Taking a "gap year" off between high school and university has become a popular option among many young people. This time off provides a break after many years of formal study....
By Hans Goredy, 2017-10-17  View full answer
Total words: 308
Band: NA
  • The introduction seems long, refine sentences.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 2 as start point.
  • Suggest to use a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.