Universities should accept equal numbers of men and women in every subject

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Question:
Universities should accept equal numbers of men and women in every subject. To what extent do you agree with this statement?
Answer 1
Gender issues have been increasing in importance through the centuries. In almost every sphere of human activity, there has been a movement towards greater equality between men and women...

Psychologically speaking, men and women are different, though they have the same potential for greatness...

Personally, students need to discover their true calling. This is an individual matter and is not influenced by the universities reserving seats for men or women...

In conclusion, equality cannot be forced upon people in education, employment, or family life. Equality is about having choices, and those who prove themselves capable will qualify for university, regardless of gender...
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Answer 2
In the modern world, people attempt to get knowledge and establish social connections for their future, but universities want to find more talented and creative students...

On the one hand, it is evident that in the past, there was discrimination between men and women, and men excelled over women in all positions of society...

On the other hand, it is equality but not justice. For example, many people want to study in certain universities and deserve much more than their partners, whether men or women...

Overall, considering these two factors, despite keeping equality between male and female students, I take the view that while university admissions accept candidate students, they should bear in mind their potential, creativity, and both practical and theoretical knowledge, not their gender differences...
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Word Statistics
GroupWord NumberDistinctPercent
All Words26213752%
Top 300 Words140 (53%)55 (40%)39%
300 - 1000 Words50 (19%)28 (20%)56%
Over 1000 Words72 (27%)54 (39%)75%
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Link Words: 28 (including link phrase: 1)
Sentences: Number: 12; Average Length: 139 characters; Words/Sentence: 21
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IELTS Essay Format:
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has and(15), their(6), students(6), they(6), women(6), for(5), that(5); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
-Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.