IELTS Academic Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Too much money is spending on repairing old buildings instead of knocking down them and building new ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #2200201
TOPIC: Too much money is spending on repairing old buildings instead of knocking down them and building new ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer 1
It indeed costs an enormous amount of money to preserve historical buildings rather than building modern premises. I disagree with this statement to a large extent, and I think that it is worthwhile to restore ancient monuments.
To begin with, the benefits of erecting new buildings as compared to protect old ones. ...
By Sukhvir Kaur Brar, 2020-02-18  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 348
AI Comment:
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(19) ARE(9) WOULD(8); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 2 as start point.
  • Suggest to use a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Suggest to refine coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
Merge the first 2 supporting paragraphs, the conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
Answer 2
People have divided into the opinion of whether an old building should be demolished and create new buildings. But I partially agree with this statement if any kinds of the building have historical background and identity it should be preserved. By contrast, any building, neither identity nor beautiful it should be ...
By jarry, 2020-04-16  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 480
AI Comment:
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has BUILDING(20) AND(16) OLD(10); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 1.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
The essay is long but misses the focus, which should be history or modernization, not tourism and revenue. "Apart from that" occurs 3 times, it may hurt your score.