IELTS Academic Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #2200208
TOPIC: As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
Answer 1
Improving the economy signifies prospering businesses. This increased profitability of these growing businesses demands a contribution towards their social responsibilities as well. I firmly believe that even a little step from them can make a huge change when it comes to society.
Today many large corporates have ...
By Heena K, 2020-02-17  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 300
AI Comment:
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has THEIR(6) FROM(6) THESE(5); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5
Re-structure the essay, use short and separate points to support your conclusion.