IELTS Academic Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: People believe that some individuals are born with leadership skills, while others think that leadership skills can be made. Discuss both views and give your idea.

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #2200213
TOPIC: People believe that some individuals are born with leadership skills, while others think that leadership skills can be made. Discuss both views and give your idea.
Answer 1
Human beings are the most amazing creatures in the world. They are born with innumerable yet so different natural talents, one of which is leadership. While some believe that it is a talent one has from birth, others think it can be practiced. Both the statements have some strength to them, but I find myself siding ...
By Heena K, 2020-02-17  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 286
AI Comment:
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
Tutor Comment:
Band 7
Should have 3rd supporting paragraph. The logic and reasoning have room to refine.
Answer 2
Great leaders do not tell what to do; instead, they show how it is done. But how can a person become a leader? While some people argue that leadership skills are acquired naturally, others take the view that these skills can be honed. This essay will discuss both views and my personal opinion about it.
On one side ...
By Jel Tan, 2020-02-20  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 324
AI Comment:
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has THAT(8) THIS(8) AND(8); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 7.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
If you stand on one side, it's much easy to compose a short essay of 300 words.
Answer 3
Some people believe that specific individuals are born with leadership qualities, while others believe that leadership skills can be learnt. I think that the ability to be a good leader is naturally acquired because most famous leaders did not undergo any leadership training, even though a few people in positions of ...
By Arthur Emagbetere, 2020-02-21  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 283
AI Comment:
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has ARE(9) LEADERSHIP(8) THAT(7); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 2 as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 5.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6.5
Suggest to use 2 supporting paragraphs before "However". Anyway, it's an excellent job!
Answer 4
People are divided into the opinion whether a good leader born with leadership attribute and learn from the classes. Some people believe it is a genetic skill people attain from parents and ancestors, whereas opponents ponder that it is obtained from the traditional way such as classes and experience. Although I argue ...
By jarry, 2020-04-14  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 425
AI Comment:
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(14) PEOPLE(11) GOOD(10); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 3 as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 0.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6.5
Good essay in writing, buy a little wordy, and not easy to get the center point. You may "Give your idea" clearly from the introduction.
Answer 5
Throughout the centuries, the desire to be a leader of any community or country has been widespread. However, not everyone is gifted leadership skills, and they have to learn it afterward while some people are lucky to have strong abilities of that by birth. This essay will discuss both views and conclude why the ...
By Sara , 2020-03-06  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 214
AI Comment:
  • The essay is less than 250, doesn't match the basic criteria.
  • The introduction seems long, refine sentences.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 2.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5
Too short, you may write more words, or a paragraph, to support the "latter opinion".