In the future, it seems more difficult to live on earth. More money should be spent on researching other planets to live, such as Mars. Do you agree or disagree?
Scientist predicts the unprecedented growth of population and pollution would get a detrimental impact on the whole world so that many nations find life on another planet such as mars and moon in the future. Some people argue that it brings enormous opportunity for people, whereas opponents condemn this statement. ...
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Band: 6.5The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Excellent essay, the topic is not easy to write. you should shrink the size and refine wordy sentences.
It might be quite challenging for the future generation to survive, especially the non-educated ones here on earth. As mentioned in my essay below-as people may adopt living on planet Mars. It could be so due to the need for money and research for great thinkers and students in contests as it will increase the ...
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Band: 5The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
The essay's logic should be improved. You may need to focus on the environment or development to support your point. Besides, the writing seems wordy.