IELTS Academic Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Some people think the news has no connection to people's lives, so then it is a waste of time to read the news in the newspaper and watch television news programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #2200307
TOPIC: Some people think the news has no connection to people's lives, so then it is a waste of time to read the news in the newspaper and watch television news programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer 1
Nowadays, news is an important part of everyone's lives, although certain people believe that it has no relevance. Therefore, they suggested that watching and reading news is a waste of time. Having said, I still believe that news is a significant factor in the daily routines of a person, and some reasons will be ...
By erika, 2020-03-10  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 408
AI Comment:
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(18) NEWS(16) THAT(12); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 4.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6.5
Excellent job. "coronavirus" is a good example in all 2020.
Answer 2
In the present scenario, individual is living in the informative era where they can find minute information through an abundance of sources such as the internet, television, and printed media. However, some people advocate that news is not related to folks' life, and it is wasting the time of people. I discord with ...
By jarry, 2020-03-10  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 489
AI Comment:
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(20) NEWS(14) THAT(12); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 2 as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 3.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
The essay seems wordy, but the conclusion should be enhanced. coronavirus is a good point in 2020. However, "English study" and "children" don't help your reasoning on this topic.