TOPIC: The shortage in housing has severe social consequences in many cities. Only the government can solve the problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Noways, according to the larger population densities, the limited amount of housing has raised people's concern. Someone suggests that it is the only government that can resolve the problems. I completely agree with this statement.
The most important relates to housing can cause traffic congestions, as the increase ...
Total words: 354
- The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
- The introduction isn't strong enough, suggest to enhance it.
- The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
- You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has HOUSING(6) ARE(6) CAN(5); try to decrease duplicated words.
- High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 2 as start point.
- Obvious Grammar Errors: 4>.
Language skills are ok, but your points may risk your score. E.g. you say "governments ... let people...", many raters think "government by people"; besides, "One baby" isn't a policy of Indian.