IELTS Academic Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Modern lifestyles make hard for people to lead active and healthy lives. Why is this the case? What governments and large companies should do to help people do excise?

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #2200526
TOPIC: Modern lifestyles make hard for people to lead active and healthy lives. Why is this the case? What governments and large companies should do to help people do excise?
Answer 1
The changes in technology are the primary factor for change in health. People tend to go outside to play games in leisure time, but now a day's children stay at home and involved in online games and other amusement apps like TikTok and helo.
The world that we knew is changing, and we have to adapt. After the ...
By robert, 2020-05-28  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 269
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 6.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5
You missed the question, which is for people, not children. And the "large companies" aren't game companies. Besides, both grammar and vocabulary have a large room to improve.