IELTS Academic Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Car drivers and cyclists share the same roads, and this can cause problems for both of them. Why is this case? What measures can be taken to solve these problems?

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #2200614
TOPIC: Car drivers and cyclists share the same roads, and this can cause problems for both of them. Why is this case? What measures can be taken to solve these problems?
Answer 1
The issue of whether vehicles and bikes should share the same road has been discussed for a while. Most people believe this kind of road utilization might lead to several problems on both sides. I will further examine the reasons and solutions in the following paragraphs.
First of all, the prevalence of cycling and ...
By chouray, 2020-06-20  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 290
AI Comment:
  • You had better rewrite the essay to 4 or 5 paragraphs.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(12) ROAD(9) MIGHT(7); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 7.
Tutor Comment:
Band 7.5
Excellent essay, if cleaning tiny syntax defects and wordy express, it should get a higher score.
Answer 2
Automobile riders and bicyclists travelling on the same roadway and causing issues for each other is one of the major problems that the world is facing today. If immediate and severe actions are not taken to tackle this scourge, the consequences would be unimaginable. However, in order to find the remedies, firstly, ...
By Sri, 2020-06-17  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 351
AI Comment:
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(14) FOR(7) THAT(5); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 4.
Tutor Comment:
Band 7
Excellent essay, but has small syntax errors. The conclusion is too long. A good sentence must be readable and understandable.
Answer 3
Issues and accidents involving drivers and cyclists can be caused since they use the same roads. The reason that it happens is that many cities do not have an infrastructure that promotes safety for users. Measures to solve these problems will be discussed along in this essay.
Even in today's modern world, ...
By marina, 2020-06-25  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 260
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 3.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
The response is acceptable in logic. But your grammar and vocabulary skills need to enhance if you want to get a higher score.
Answer 4
Nowadays, with the development of technology, many people have chosen their transportation to be a car instead of public transports. Still, there are a minority of people who would rather go by their bike than their car. Because of this, the municipals have created roads that both cars and bikes can all use. However, ...
By Pat, 2020-06-17  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 350
AI Comment:
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has CYCLISTS(11) CAR(10) CAN(9); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 2 as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 5.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6.5
Excellent essay; but a few sentences seem wordy try to rephrase them.
Answer 5
Nowadays, we have a plethora of ways in which we can reach our destination. Yet, the transportation industry mainly relies on motorized vehicles, and roads are built for their usage. The problem has occurred because cycling became more popular, which results in sharing roads. There are several causes of this, but ...
By Misia, 2020-06-23  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 294
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 7.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5
Not fully understand the question. The "why" isn't for "why people prefer bike", but "why there are problems to share roads." Besides, grammar and vocabulary have a big room to improve.
Answer 6
There is no doubt that transportation like cars and other motor vehicles is increasing day by day. Although modern cars have replaced the utilisation of cycles there are many obstacles that are faced by both car drivers and cyclists because of the usage of the same roads as this can cause more chances of accidents ...
By Jaspreet Kaur , 2020-07-01  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 273
AI Comment:
  • Paragraph 1 seems long, suggest to split it.
  • Paragraph 2 is relatively short, enrich it.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(8) THERE(6) ARE(6); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 2 as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Conclusion seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 5.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5
The logic is ok, but both grammar and logic need to enhance.