IELTS Academic Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Car drivers and cyclists share the same roads, and this can cause problems for both of them. Why is this case? What measures can be taken to solve these problems?

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #2200614
TOPIC: Car drivers and cyclists share the same roads, and this can cause problems for both of them. Why is this case? What measures can be taken to solve these problems?
Answer 1
The issue of whether vehicles and bikes should share the same road has been discussed for a while. Most people believe this kind of road utilization might lead to several problems on both sides. I will further examine the reasons and solutions in the following paragraphs.
First of all, the prevalence of cycling and ...
By chouray, 2020-06-20  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 290
AI Comment:
  • You had better rewrite the essay to 4 or 5 paragraphs.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(12) ROAD(9) MIGHT(7); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 7.
Tutor Comment:
Band 7.5
Excellent essay, if cleaning tiny syntax defects and wordy express, it should get a higher score.
Answer 2
Automobile riders and bicyclists travelling on the same roadway and causing issues for each other is one of the major problems that the world is facing today. If immediate and severe actions are not taken to tackle this scourge, the consequences would be unimaginable. However, in order to find the remedies, firstly, ...
Total words: 351
AI Comment:
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(14) FOR(7) THAT(5); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 4.
Tutor Comment:
Band 7
Excellent essay, but has small syntax errors. The conclusion is too long. A good sentence must be readable and understandable.
Answer 3
Nowadays, with the development of technology, many people have chosen their transportation to be a car instead of public transports. Still, there are a minority of people who would rather go by their bike than their car. Because of this, the municipals have created roads that both cars and bikes can all use. However, ...
Total words: 350
AI Comment:
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has CYCLISTS(11) CAR(10) CAN(9); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 2 as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 5.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6.5
Excellent essay; but a few sentences seem wordy try to rephrase them.