Telecommunication has become a crucial part of sharing information, and people have come closer due to this technology. A plethora of masses argues that communication on cell phones should be prohibited in public and crowded places. Conversely, others esteemed that telecommunication should be allowed in social areas. I ...
-The ideas presented are not always developed and or relevant, the second paragraph is too long and off the topics (privacy and convenience) a little.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident and cohesive devices are used, though rather mechanically.
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-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice and spelling.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical errors, such as article (a, an, the).
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