Today, more and more full-time university students focus on other activities rather than spend a lot of time studying. Some people think it is essential for university students to be involved in other activities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
As the number of university students who engage in extracurricular activities increases, some see this trend as a positive change. I completely agree that students should be encouraged to participate in non-academic activities since such activities benefit them in multiple ways.
To begin with, building experiences ...
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Band: 6.5The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt., but your conclusion needs to enhance.Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is logical, and there is a clear central topic to each paragraph.Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, and it shows an awareness of styles and collocation.Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and although errors occur, and some sentences are wordy, but they rarely reduce communication.
Nowadays, many students in their full-time higher studies, spend more time getting involved in different activities rather than studying. A group of individuals thinks it is crucial for a better career in the future. I totally agree with the statement.
On the one hand, students who take part in extracurricular ...
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Band: 5.5The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok.Coherence and Cohesion:
-There is a clear overall progression in the response, but somewhat mechanically, with occasional errors in the latter part.
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-The essay didn't use less common vocabulary with accuracy.
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-Some grammatical errors, such as article (a, an, the).
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