IELTS Academic Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: It is believed that secondary school children should study international news as one of their school subjects. Others think that this is a waste of valuable school time. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

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Question:
It is believed that secondary school children should study international news as one of their school subjects. Others think that this is a waste of valuable school time. Discuss both views and give your opinions.
Answer 1
In this globalizing world, some people think that international issues should be taught in high schools, while others believe that it would not worth the time for children to study such a subject at school. As far as I am concerned, global issues should be incorporated into central subjects at high school so as to ...
By SY, 2020-09-15  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 393
Band: 6.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The prompt is not fully addressed, there is an attempt to discuss some benefits and disadvantages, but ideas for disadvantages are limited. By the question, you should discuss both views equally, then give own point.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression, but some places seem wordy.
Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, and it shows an awareness of styles and collocation.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and although errors occur, they rarely reduce communication.
Answer 2
There is no doubt that international news should be included as a subject for secondary school students. While some people believe that subjects like these are a waste of time, others argue that international news will make students aware of global activities. In this essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument ...
By Vikrant, 2020-10-29  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 274
Band: 5.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The response looks at two sides of the topic, but but some are insufficiently developed.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generlly arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is limited, but just about adequate for the task, try to enhance IELTS vocabulary.
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Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and although errors occur, they rarely reduce communication.