IELTS Academic Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Some people think that the detailed criminal description of newspapers and TV can have bad consequences on society, so this kind of information should be restricted to media. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #2201024
Question:
Some people think that the detailed criminal description of newspapers and TV can have bad consequences on society, so this kind of information should be restricted to media. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Answer 1
The crime rate is growing at an alarming rate in all parts of the world. And its broadcast on television and newspapers has resulted adversely on a common man's psychology. Here, some people suggest that these kinds of detailed crime-related news should be bared to be telecasted on any public platform. I partially ...
By ramandeep kour, 2020-10-25  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 345
Band: 6.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a clear position is presented throughout the response, although the introduction can be shorten a little,
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generlly arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a good range of complex structures, and many sentences have accurate grammar and punctuation.
Answer 2
Nowadays, Newspapers and TV programs are starting to present every condition and detail about the crime. However, a few people believe that the detailed fact about the criminal from the journal and TV Program has a negative effect. Elder people thought that they should protect this type of condition by limiting the ...
By Myat Pwint Phyu, 2020-10-25  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 272
Band: 5.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generlly arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is limited, but just about adequate for the task, try to enhance IELTS vocabulary.
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Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical errors are frequent, such as nouns (singular, plural).
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