Question: Some think that too much money has been spent looking after and repairing old buildings, so we should knock down old buildings and build modern ones instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer Hints: You should discuss the views of the two sides, then give your opinion.
You can choose "too much money is spent on the old building" or "old building should be demolished and then build a new one."
Support new building
The cost of repairing old buildings is too high.
The old house is not worthwhile; it is a waste of money.
New buildings bring city development and chance.
Support old building
Repairing old buildings is cheaper than building new ones.
The fast development of real estate wastes resources.
Maintaining old buildings is to keep the city's characteristics.
The locals have a sense of belonging because of historic buildings.
As cities grow and become more crowded, there is often a debate about exactly what sort of construction is best in urban centres. Should we build modern towers out of glass and...
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