Some people believe that too many resources and attention are devoted to protecting wild animals and birds
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Some people believe that too many resources and attention are devoted to protecting wild animals and birds. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people believe that too many resources and attention are devoted to protecting wild animals and birds. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer 1
Nowadays, the most distressing issue is that for protecting wild animals. Some people assume that we pay more attention to animal welfare...
To start with, biodiversity is essential to the planet's well-being, and the loss of species can disrupt the balance of the ecosystem...
Apart from that, not all kinds of animals and birds die away because of a man. Do not forget about natural factors...
In conclusion, from my perspective, it is essential to protect wild animals because many species are extinct due to human activity...
To start with, biodiversity is essential to the planet's well-being, and the loss of species can disrupt the balance of the ecosystem...
Apart from that, not all kinds of animals and birds die away because of a man. Do not forget about natural factors...
In conclusion, from my perspective, it is essential to protect wild animals because many species are extinct due to human activity...
Band: 6
Word Statistics
| Group | Word Number | Distinct | Percent |
|---|---|---|---|
| All Words | 251 | 128 | 50% |
| Top 300 Words | 120 (47%) | 44 (34%) | 36% |
| 300 - 1000 Words | 34 (13%) | 23 (17%) | 67% |
| Over 1000 Words | 97 (38%) | 61 (47%) | 62% |
Other Comments (daana)
Link Words: 21 (including link phrase: 4)
Sentences: Number: 20; Average Length: 78 characters; Words/Sentence: 12
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has animals(9), and(8), people(6), for(5), species(5), extinction(4), that(3); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Task Response:IELTS Essay Format:
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has animals(9), and(8), people(6), for(5), species(5), extinction(4), that(3); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident; cohesive devices are sometimes used inaccurately.
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Lexical Resources:
-The essay didn't use less common vocabulary with accuracy.
Answer 2
Concerns about too many resources and attention focused on protecting wild animals and birds may constrain the resources on other items like pets or economic animals...
There are several reasons to believe we don't have to pay much more attention to wild animals. Firstly, wild animals are the same as humans, being pets and economic animals, because they are all animals, and there should not be any differential treatment between the animals...
On the other hand, I hold the standing that we should emphasize the protection of wild animals. With climate change, more and more wild animals are strongly endangered or extinct...
To sum up, although there is some hold on equal treatment of every animal, we shouldn't intervene in nature too much...
There are several reasons to believe we don't have to pay much more attention to wild animals. Firstly, wild animals are the same as humans, being pets and economic animals, because they are all animals, and there should not be any differential treatment between the animals...
On the other hand, I hold the standing that we should emphasize the protection of wild animals. With climate change, more and more wild animals are strongly endangered or extinct...
To sum up, although there is some hold on equal treatment of every animal, we shouldn't intervene in nature too much...
Band: 6
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