Small town-center shops are going out of business. As a result, people without cars have limited access to out-of-town stores, which may increase the use of cars.

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Question:
In some countries, small town-center shops are going out of business because people tend to drive to large out-of-town stores. As a result, people without cars have limited access to out-of-town stores, which may increase the use of cars. Do you think the disadvantages of this change outweigh its advantages?
Answer Hints:
This is an advantage and disadvantage essay. You should write about the good and the bad two sides. Moreover, the question has several parts; the basic logic is about 'small shops going out of business', 'an increase in the use of cars'.

The easiest structure for an advantages/disadvantages essay is a four-paragraph one. In conclusion, you can give your view and briefly say why.

Advantage
  • All-in-one mall decreases customer driving times, decreases car usage.
  • Suburban people drive shorter to malls, which decreases car usage.
  • Centralized suppliers also decrease sellers' car usage
DisAdvantage
  • With small shops going out, customers have to go to malls for everyday life stuff, which increases car usage.
  • Downtown customers need to drive longer to shop, which increases car usage.
  • the larger mall, the longer driving, is becoming a trend.
Answer 1
As a result of urbanization, cities are now surrounded by suburbs, which often feature large malls or shopping centers...

Beginning with the positive aspects, it is clear that a gigantic mall offers consumers more choices...

Nevertheless, there are some highly undesirable effects of this situation. For one, large stores and malls are operated by monolithic corporations that run small shop owners out of business while not returning much to the local community...

Overall, while having everything available in one location is undeniably convenient, the harm to local communities is similarly straightforward...
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Top 300 Words119 (41%)49 (28%)41%
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Link Words: 22 (including link phrase: 1)
Sentences: Number: 14; Average Length: 135 characters; Words/Sentence: 20
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok but does not catch up with the topic 'use of the car' very well. The example of Walmart doesn't help here.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Each paragraph has a clear central topic, which is developed, and there is an effective use of cohesive devices.
Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, showing an awareness of styles and collocation.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-A variety of complex structures is used with some flexibility and accuracy.