Governments should not provide financial support to artists because arts do not improve people's life. Instead, they should let artists support themselves.

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Question:
Governments should not financially support artists (like painters, writers, musicians, etc.) because arts do not improve people's lives. Instead, they should let artists support themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer Hints:
Choose your position at first. Two parallel propositions appeared on this topic, spending money on art or other public services." These two pieces of information must appear in either of the positions.

One position is to discuss the benefits of 'spending money on art,' then discuss the reasons for 'spending money on art.'

Another position is to discuss the shortcomings of 'spending money on art,' then discuss the reasons for 'not just spending money art, other public services also important.'

Viewpoint 1:
  • Art meets people's spiritual needs, makes people happy;
  • Art creates cultural values for society;
  • Art business can still be a part of public service;
  • Public services improve people's living standards;
viewpoint 2:
  • Art and other similar activities aren't the basic demand of common people;
  • Spending on other public services can help more people;
Answer 1
People have different views about the funding of creative artists. Because arts do not improve people's lives, some people disagree with government support for artists; I'm afraid I have to disagree with this statement and believe that money for art projects should come from governments and other sources...

Some art projects definitely require help from the state. There are many works of art in public spaces in the UK, such as streets or squares in city centers...

On the other hand, I can understand the arguments against government funding for art. The main reason for this view is that governments have more important concerns...

Arts is part of culture and part of society. But its values can not be scaled by just money. In a word, there are good reasons why artists should rely on alternative sources of financial support...
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Sentences: Number: 18; Average Length: 111 characters; Words/Sentence: 18
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has and(13), for(10), artists(7), art(5), governments(4), support(4), this(4); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Task Response:
-Ideas relating to each sector mentioned in the prompt are presented, but some are not developed much.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-A wide range of vocabulary is used appropriately and naturally.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammar and punctuation are well controlled.