Governments should not provide financial support to artists (like painters, writers, musicians, etc) because arts do not improve people's life. Instead, they should let artists support themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Choose your position at first. Two parallel propositions appeared on this topic, spending money on art or other public services." These two pieces of information must appear in either of the positions.
One position is to discuss the benefits of 'spending money on art,' then discuss the reasons for 'spending money on art.'
Another position is to discuss the shortcomings of 'spending money on art,' then discuss the reasons for 'not just spending money art, other public services also important.'
- Art meets people's spiritual needs, makes people happy;
- Art creates cultural values for society;
- Art business can still be a part of public service;
- Public services improve people's living standards;
- Art and other similar activities aren't the basic demand of common people;
- Spending on other public services can help more people;
People have different views about the funding of creative artists. Because arts do not improve people's lives, some people disagree with government support for artists; I believe that money for art projects should come from governments and other sources.
Some art projects definitely require help from the state. ...
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Band: 7The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.Task Response:
-Ideas relating to each sector mentioned in the prompt are presented, but there is not much development of some.Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.Lexical Resources:
-There is a wide range of vocabulary, used appropriately and naturally.Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammar and punctuation are well controlled.