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IELTS Writing Task 2 & Answer: People used to live in the same city throughout their lives, but now they change where they live several times. What is the cause? Do you think it is a positive or negative trend?

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #7012
Question:
People used to live in the same city throughout their lives, but now they change where they live several times. What is the cause? Do you think it is a positive or negative trend?
Answer 1
In the olden days, people resided in the same city for their lifetime, but now the trend is changing. There are various reasons for this development, and I feel that it is good for people to move to other metropolitan cities based on their needs.
There are several motives behind why people are constantly migrating ...
By MF, 2021-02-20  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 269
Band: 7
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a clear position is presented throughout the response; the main ideas are relevant, but some are insufficiently developed.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident and cohesive devices are used, though rather mechanically.
Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, and it shows an awareness of styles and collocation.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a wide range of structures, these are used flexibly; however, there are occasional errors in grammatical control.
Answer 2
In the past, people used to spend their entire lives in the same city, but the current trend is that people relocate to different places, several times during their lifetime. The major reason for this is the availability of better employment, and I think this is a positive development as it provides a wide range of ...
By Rian, 2021-02-22  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 310
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The prompt is not fully addressed, there is an attempt to discuss, but ideas are limited. "a positive or negative trend?" you should enhance your point in the latter part.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-There is a clear overall progression in the response, but somewhat mechanically, with occasional errors.
Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is limited, but just about adequate for the task, try to enhance IELTS vocabulary.
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Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, with a fair degree of accuracy.