People used to live in the same city throughout their lives, but now they change where they live several times

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Question:
People used to live in the same city throughout their lives, but now they change where they live several times. What is the cause? Do you think it is a positive or negative trend?
Answer 1
In the past, people spent their entire lives in the same city, but the current trend is that people relocate to different places several times...

Nowadays, people move to different cities whenever they are offered a better job than their current one...

Relocating to a new place can benefit people by providing various experiences. Relating to a new place is quite challenging, and overcoming that makes a person strong and resilient...

In conclusion, more and more people of the current generation have changed their place of living many times compared to the earlier generations because of the opportunities for work and the fact that it benefits them in various ways...
Band: 6.5
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Answer 2
In the olden days, people resided in the same city for their lifetime, but now the trend is changing...

There are several motives behind why people are constantly migrating to different places. Firstly, most students these days prefer to learn from famous universities and to do so, they may have to enroll in a college away from their locality...

I believe it is advantageous for people to move to different urban areas as per the demand. Students can learn the latest courses from world-class colleges and expert tutors...

In conclusion, I believe there are various benefits of moving to different cities, and people should do that to have a better future...
Band: 6
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GroupWord NumberDistinctPercent
All Words25413051%
Top 300 Words135 (53%)47 (36%)34%
300 - 1000 Words59 (23%)33 (25%)55%
Over 1000 Words60 (23%)50 (38%)83%
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Link Words: 18 (including link phrase: 0)
Sentences: Number: 13; Average Length: 114 characters; Words/Sentence: 19
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has and(10), people(8), are(6), for(5), move(5), different(5), their(4); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a clear position is presented throughout the response; the main ideas are relevant, but some are insufficiently developed.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident, and cohesive devices are used, though rather mechanically.
Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, showing an awareness of styles and collocation.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a wide range of structures; these are used flexibly.