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IELTS Writing Task 2 & Answer: Many animals are endangered. Some people argue that we should only protect animals that are useful to humans. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Question:
Many animals are endangered. Some people argue that we should only protect animals that are useful to humans. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer 1
Various animals have gone extinct in the last few decades, and still, these numbers are rapidly increasing. It is often argued that we should protect animals that are beneficial in some or another way. However, I can't entirely agree with this opinion and believe that we need to preserve them all, which are endangered ...
By endangered animals, 2021-03-13  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 288
Band: 7
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok, but some are insufficiently developed.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Each paragraph has a clear central topic, which is developed, and there is an effective use of cohesive devices.
Lexical Resources:
-There is a good range of vocabulary, and there are some less common words and phrases
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and although errors occur, they rarely reduce communication.
Answer 2
Certain individuals believe that the government should protect only those animals that are essential. I would disagree with this opinion and think that all animals play an important role in the environment.
On the one hand, if the government would only protect useful animals such as cows, horses, pigs, chickens, and ...
By Mollie, 2021-03-20  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 240
Band: 5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-There is some misunderstanding of the task. The useful animals aren't cows and horses. Underlength, less than 250 words;  it limits the Band score rating.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-The range of lexis isn't generally adequate and appropriate.
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Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There are attempts to produce complex structures, but these usually contain errors.
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