Music has been and will continue to be the universal language of mankind

IELTS Writing Task 2 & Answer: Music has been and will continue to be the universal language of mankind. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #7018
Question:
Music has been and will continue to be the universal language of mankind. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer 1
In the modern world, music occupies a large part of our lives, and we interact with it on an everyday basis unconsciously. It is believed that music has been and is foreseen to be the common language of humankind. From my perspective, I totally agree with this idea.
First, music comprises various aspects of cultures ...
By Aoi, 2021-03-19  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 300
Band: 7
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-This is a well-organized essay, presenting ideas on both sides, developing these ideas effectively throughout the response.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident and cohesive devices are used, though rather mechanically.
Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, and although there are a few choice errors.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a variety of complex structures with frequent error-free sentences and good control over grammar and punctuation.
Answer 2
There is no doubt that music plays a massive role in people's lives ranging from youngsters to the elderly. Whether or not it is the universal language of humankind will be debated and delved into. From one perspective, listening to and playing music, particularly musical instruments, does not require knowledge of a ...
By Muhammad Tabish, 2021-03-19  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 287
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-Off-topic a little, there is some misunderstanding of the task. The structure should be refined to like an IELTS academic essay to get higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The response is organized into paragraphs, but the focus of each is not always clear.
Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, and it shows an awareness of styles and collocation.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a good range of complex structures, and many sentences have accurate grammar and punctuation.
Answer 3
It is claimed by many that music is a key distinguisher of culture and generations, while other believe that music bridge the cultural and generation gaps. Although there are some reasons for prioritizing the first opinion, music also can bring people together by expressing universal sentiments.
On the one hand, ...
By Farid, 2021-03-21  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 357
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-Off-topic a little, the raters may doubt the essay is memorized, please prepare topics (not essays) in advance.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is quite wide and shows awareness of collocation.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, with a fair degree of accuracy.