Many people think that the best way to learn a culture is to learn the language of it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many nowadays think that the best option to learn other people's culture and habits is to learn their language. Although it seems logical, I largely disagree with this statement but with a certain exception mostly related to learning foreign culture.
Such a conservative point of view is partly true for the scholars, ...
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Band: 7The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok.Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is logical, and there is a clear central topic to each paragraph.Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, and although there are a few wordy sentences.Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a wide range of structures, these are used flexibly; however, there are occasional errors.
Culture plays a significant role in today's societies, and many people are curious about other cultures. Some individuals argue that in order to learn any culture, you need to study their language first. While there are some alternative ways to do that, I completely agree with the former argument.
To begin with, ...
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Band: 6.5The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.Task Response:
-Don't express a clear position in the first-half essay, off-topic "best way" a little.Coherence and Cohesion:
-It is a good response that would achieve an even higher score if there was a consistent logic.Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice and spelling.Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, with a fair degree of accuracy.
Culture is a unique feature of society that is bonded with emotions. Many people say that a better understanding of the culture will be possible only through the language that culture represents. I can't entirely agree with this statement. In this essay, I would like to point out various factors relating to this.
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Band: 6The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.Task Response:
-Off-topic a little, the key point is "the best way." Only partially address the prompt.Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident and cohesive devices are used, though rather mechanically.
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-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task.Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There are attempts to produce complex sentence forms, but there is a lack of grammatical control in some sentences.