People who decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it are more likely to have a satisfying working life than those who change jobs frequently.

IELTS Writing Task 2 & Answer

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #7049
Question:
People who decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it are more likely to have a satisfying working life than those who change jobs frequently. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer Hints:
This "agree or disagree" question is open to answer. You may choose to either agree or disagree.

Support
  • Fully investigate and research the job and its career before entering, understand what you will do deeply.
  • Continue to improve professional ability when working.
  • Experiences help to work more easily and confidently.
  • Enjoy teamwork whose mates are acquaintances for a long time.
Oppose
  • Society changes every day, as well as one's job interests; so we need to change jobs to satisfy the new interests.
  • Works in various places or industries are colorful life experiences.
  • Complicated and diverse careers build richer skills, which help to hunt for satisfying jobs more easily.
Answer 1
Many people decide to start a career and earn money while the intention develops from the early stages of their lives. As a result, they are happy with their working life. I completely agree with this.
Frequently, the dream of taking up a career begins in the early part of life. When children are in school, they ...
By Jim cater, 2021-09-26  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 391
Band: 7.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-Ideas relating to each sector mentioned in the prompt are presented, but there is not much development of some; the fourth paragraph is a little off the topic of "satisfaction and changing jobs frequency," had better re-write it.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Each paragraph has a clear central topic, which is developed, and there is an effective use of cohesive devices.
Lexical Resources:
-There is a wide range of vocabulary, used appropriately and naturally.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammar and punctuation are well controlled.