People who decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it are more likely to have a satisfying working life than those who change jobs frequently.
Question: People who decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it are more likely to have a satisfying working life than those who change jobs frequently. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer Hints: This "agree or disagree" question is open to answer. You may choose to either agree or disagree.
Support
Fully investigate and research the job and its career before entering, understand what you will do deeply.
Continue to improve professional ability when working.
Experiences help to work more easily and confidently.
Enjoy teamwork whose mates are acquaintances for a long time.
Oppose
Society changes every day, as well as one's job interests; so we need to change jobs to satisfy the new interests.
Works in various places or industries are colorful life experiences.
Complicated and diverse careers build richer skills, which help to hunt for satisfying jobs more easily.
Answer 1
Many people decide to start a career and earn money while the intention develops from the early stages of their lives...
The dream of taking up a career frequently begins in the early part of life. Children in school compose essays on 'Aim in Life,' which mention their intentions in adulthood...
On the opposite, in my life, I have met some unhappy people with their career paths. They blame misfortune because they want to take something else as their career but are to work on a completely different track, which brings dissatisfaction...
People would like specific issues in line with their regular salaries, such as a cozy environment, flexible working hours, and extra benefits for a satisfying working life...
To conclude, we work to live a happy life, and if the working conditions can enhance living, we become more comfortable...
Sentences: Number: 20; Average Length: 110 characters; Words/Sentence: 18
Suggestions: IELTS Essay Format: -The essay is too long, try to shrink it. -The introduction isn't strong enough, try to enhance it. -You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has and(12), their(12), they(10), career(8), working(7), life(7), with(6); try to decrease duplicated words. -High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some. -Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Task Response: -Ideas relating to each sector mentioned in the prompt are presented, but there is not much development of some; the fourth paragraph, a little off the topic of 'satisfaction and changing jobs frequency,' had better re-write. Coherence and Cohesion: -Each paragraph has a precise central topic, which is developed, and cohesive devices are effectively used. Lexical Resources: -A wide range of vocabulary is used appropriately and naturally. Grammar Range and Accuracy: -Grammar and punctuation are well controlled.