People who decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it are more likely to have a satisfying working life than those who change jobs frequently.

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #7049
Question:
People who decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it are more likely to have a satisfying working life than those who change jobs frequently. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer Hints:
This "agree or disagree" question is open to answer. You may choose to either agree or disagree.

Support
  • Fully investigate and research the job and its career before entering, understand what you will do deeply.
  • Continue to improve professional ability when working.
  • Experiences help to work more easily and confidently.
  • Enjoy teamwork whose mates are acquaintances for a long time.
Oppose
  • Society changes every day, as well as one's job interests; so we need to change jobs to satisfy the new interests.
  • Works in various places or industries are colorful life experiences.
  • Complicated and diverse careers build richer skills, which help to hunt for satisfying jobs more easily.
Answer 1
Many people decide to start a career and earn money while the intention develops from the early stages of their lives...

The dream of taking up a career frequently begins in the early part of life. Children in school compose essays on 'Aim in Life,' which mention their intentions in adulthood...

On the opposite, in my life, I have met some unhappy people with their career paths. They blame misfortune because they want to take something else as their career but are to work on a completely different track, which brings dissatisfaction...

People would like specific issues in line with their regular salaries, such as a cozy environment, flexible working hours, and extra benefits for a satisfying working life...

To conclude, we work to live a happy life, and if the working conditions can enhance living, we become more comfortable...
Band: 7.5
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All Words37317446%
Top 300 Words202 (54%)62 (35%)30%
300 - 1000 Words71 (19%)43 (24%)60%
Over 1000 Words100 (26%)69 (39%)69%
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Link Words: 26 (including link phrase: 1)
Sentences: Number: 20; Average Length: 110 characters; Words/Sentence: 18
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-The essay is too long, try to shrink it.
-The introduction isn't strong enough, try to enhance it.
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has and(12), their(12), they(10), career(8), working(7), life(7), with(6); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Task Response:
-Ideas relating to each sector mentioned in the prompt are presented, but there is not much development of some; the fourth paragraph, a little off the topic of 'satisfaction and changing jobs frequency,' had better re-write.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Each paragraph has a precise central topic, which is developed, and cohesive devices are effectively used.
Lexical Resources:
-A wide range of vocabulary is used appropriately and naturally.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammar and punctuation are well controlled.