Social media enable people to keep in touch with each other and learn about news events. Do advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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Question:
Social media enable people to keep in touch with each other and learn about news events. Do advantages outweigh disadvantages?
Answer Hints:
It's a pros and cons question. This topic is to discuss the advantages and disadvantages of social media for information exchange and news viewing. Note that it is social media, not a simple network, and you shouldn't write the news and social media separately.

Advantages
  • Staying at home to exchange information and view news.
  • Convenience and time saving
  • Get more information.
  • Thoughts will not be blocked.
Disadvantages
  • No need to go out; lack real social experience.
  • Lack of social life and real friends.
  • Information sources are narrow.
  • Easy to be misled.
Answer 1
The Internet has changed the way people interact and get surrounding information. More and more people prefer social media to exchange thoughts and ideas and attain news from networks...

First of all, the primary advantage of social media is that it allows people to stay connected no matter how far they live...

In addition, time is another major factor in letting people get distant from traditional news, as people have less time to sit and watch TV or read newspapers as they did in the bygone era...

On the other hand, it has been widely seen that face-to-face interaction has dramatically plunged and is not as strong due to social websites...

In recapitulation, I think it is a boon that social media allows people to stay in contact and be updated with their surroundings in the same place...
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All Words34517651%
Top 300 Words186 (53%)69 (39%)37%
300 - 1000 Words67 (19%)42 (23%)62%
Over 1000 Words92 (26%)65 (36%)70%
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Link Words: 24 (including link phrase: 1)
Sentences: Number: 17; Average Length: 115 characters; Words/Sentence: 20
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has and(13), people(11), social(7), news(5), that(5), they(5), get(4); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Task Response:
-Ideas relating to each sector mentioned in the prompt are presented, All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a clear position is presented throughout the response.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The writing is well organized and has a clear progression throughout, although using some cohesive devices could have been more flexible.
Lexical Resources:
-There is a good range of vocabulary and some less common words and phrases.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-A variety of complex structures is used with some flexibility and accuracy.