Social media enable people to keep in touch with each other and learn about news events. Do advantages outweigh disadvantages?

IELTS Writing Task 2 & Answer

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #7053
Question:
Social media enable people to keep in touch with each other and learn about news events. Do advantages outweigh disadvantages´╝č
Answer Hints:
It's a pros and cons question. This topic is to discuss the advantages and disadvantages of social media for information exchange and news viewing. Note that it is social media, not a simple network, and you shouldn't write the news and social media separately.

Advantages
  • Staying at home to exchange information and view news.
  • Convenience and time saving
  • Get more information.
  • Thoughts will not be blocked.
Disadvantages
  • No need to go out; lack real social experience.
  • Lack of social life and real friends.
  • Information sources are narrow.
  • Easy to be misled.
Answer 1
The Internet has changed the way people interact and get surrounding information. More and more people prefer social media to exchange thoughts and ideas and attain news from networks. Even though there are a few drawbacks of the trend, the advantages are far more.
First of all, the primary advantage of social media ...
By Greensea Red, 2021-11-30  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 347
Band: 8
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-Ideas relating to each sector mentioned in the prompt are presented, All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a clear position is presented throughout the response.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The writing is well organized, and there is clear progression throughout, although the use of some cohesive devices could be more flexible.
Lexical Resources:
-There is a good range of vocabulary, and there are some less common words and phrases.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-A variety of complex structures is used with some flexibility and accuracy.