The shortage of housing in big cities can cause severe consequences, and only government action can solve the problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Question:
The housing shortage in big cities can cause severe consequences, and only government action can solve the problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer Hints:
You can agree with the statement straightforwardly; the reverse position would be harder to support. It would be best to focus on actions only by governments' functionalities.

Agree
The government can control the housing requirement and increase house building.
  • Planning city development is the government's job, including area and population.
  • The government's tax and land policy can ease the housing shortage.
  • The government usually runs and controls public traffic.
  • The government can push center areas and suburban development parallelly.
Disagree
Population changes are by generic economic activities; the house building isn't any government behavior but a social investment.
  • House shortage is due to economic development; the government cannot control the latter.
  • House shortage needs to build more houses; the government cannot do this alone.
Answer 1
As we know, the problem of housing scarcity is severe in some cities. It is responsible for some adverse outcomes in the community...

Discussing steps should be taken by the center to eradicate the housing deficit. The most anticipated one is encouraging citizens to live in the countryside...

Moreover, the authority should also work to increase job opportunities in rural areas as most civilians come across metropolia only to get employment...

On the other hand, citizens and builders must try to eliminate the following issues. Builders and individuals should vertically develop the city...

To conclude, I believe that, to a considerable extent, the problem of inadequate shelter can be eradicated by government steps such as making citizens more conscious of living in rural areas and encouraging builders to take responsibility for growing metropolitan areas vertically...
Band: 7
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All Words33717050%
Top 300 Words167 (49%)56 (32%)33%
300 - 1000 Words66 (19%)41 (24%)62%
Over 1000 Words104 (30%)73 (42%)70%
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Link Words: 22 (including link phrase: 3)
Sentences: Number: 20; Average Length: 103 characters; Words/Sentence: 16
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has and(7), should(6), government(4), areas(4), there(4), this(4), for(3); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok. It would be best to emphasize 'only government action,' not 'how government action,' to score higher.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Each paragraph has a clear central topic, which is developed, and there is an effective use of cohesive devices.
Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, showing an awareness of styles and collocation.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical control is variable: some complex structures are produced accurately.