Question: Some people believe using modern technology (digital photographs, blogs) is the best way to record and remember important personal events. Others think the traditional method (making photo albums, writing diaries) is better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Answer Hints: You need to discuss the views of the two sides. As for your opinion, modern technology should replace old tools.
Using modern technology
Convenient, any time, any place
Multiple media, precise
Manageable, easy to share
Using traditional way
Privacy and personal data safe
Cheap and reliable to keep for a long time
Easy to handle for older people
With time and technological development, the method of recording our life has been changed. Some people think the more modern, the better. Digital photographs and blogs are over the traditional ones, like photo albums and paper diaries. But others have the reverse opinion. I believe the two sides have their own points; ...
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version. Task Response: -This is a well-organized essay, presenting ideas on both sides, developing these ideas effectively throughout the response. Coherence and Cohesion: -There is clear overall progression, with your opinion presented at the end. Lexical Resources: -The range of vocabulary is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, and it shows an awareness of styles and collocation; some of informal expressions are not appropriate in this type of response. Grammar Range and Accuracy: -There is a wide range of structures, these are used flexibly; however, there are occasional errors in punctuation.