It is irrefutable that the world now demands enormous energy resources like gas and oil. As a result, people have to look for more natural resources from the remained and unexplored areas. It has pros and cons, but I believe that the advantages of this practice clearly outweigh the disadvantages as it benefits the ...
Band: 7The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok, but some ideas aren't supported with clear examples, the example Erdos example seems fake, and the 3rd paragraph doesn't matter with "local," no help to the essay.Coherence and Cohesion:
-Each paragraph has a clear central topic, which is developed, and there is an effective use of cohesive devices.Lexical Resources:
-There is a wide range of vocabulary, used appropriately and naturally.Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-A variety of complex structures is used with some flexibility and accuracy.