The increasing demand for oil and gas has made it necessary to look for energy sources in remote and untouched natural places. Do the advantages outweigh not doing?

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Question:
The increasing demand for oil and gas has made it necessary to look for these energy sources in remote and untouched natural places. Do you think the advantages of locating oil and gas in these areas outweigh the disadvantages of damaging these places?
Answer Hints:
Pros and cons topic. You need to be careful to limit, that is, the topic limits the location, which is those remote and uninhabited places, so it is unreasonable if you say to promote local economic development.

Pros
  • Remote areas to find and produce oil/gas impact fewer people.
  • Explore more oil and gas resources to meet demand.
  • More oil resources lead to lower oil prices and improve the quality of life.
  • Production costs drop, products are cheaper and help economic development.
  • More energy help to avoid competition and even some military conflicts.
Cons
  • Oil from remote areas is expensive and causes excessive dependence on oil and gas.
  • Destroy the local environment
  • Cause damage to harmony between man and nature.
Answer 1
It is irrefutable that the world now demands enormous energy resources like gas and oil. As a result, people have to look for more natural resources from the remaining and unexplored areas...

Proponents of such extractions think that the natural resources are a chance for remote areas to speed up development...

Furthermore, energy is critical for modern countries. The lack of oil or gas may impact so many aspects of society that any country has to prioritize energy on its development list...

On the other hand, one obvious con is the environmental hurt. The unsatisfiable energy needs often have caused detrimental adverse effects on nature...

To sum up, although we have to handle environmental and ecosystem risks positively, I believe that the advantages of exploiting oil and gas in remote and untouched areas outweigh the disadvantages...
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Link Words: 29 (including link phrase: 2)
Sentences: Number: 22; Average Length: 96 characters; Words/Sentence: 16
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-The essay is too long, try to shrink it.
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has and(15), that(8), gas(7), oil(7), for(6), areas(6), have(5); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok, but some ideas aren't supported with clear examples; the Erdos example seems fake, and the 3rd paragraph doesn't matter with 'local,' no help to the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Each paragraph has a precise central topic, which is developed, and cohesive devices are effectively used.
Lexical Resources:
-A wide range of vocabulary is used appropriately and naturally.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-A variety of complex structures is used with some flexibility and accuracy.