In developing countries, the rural population is moving to urban areas for enormous job opportunities and education resources. This tendency has more benefits as compared to its drawbacks. This essay will analyze the merits and demits in the following paragraphs with relevant examples.
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Band: 6The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.Task Response:
-The prompt is not fully addressed,The topic is the "effects on the environment". The essay doesn't focus on the environment, so cannot get a higher score.Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.Lexical Resources:
-There is a wide range of vocabulary, used appropriately and naturally.Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-A variety of complex structures is used with some flexibility and accuracy. Grammar and punctuation are well controlled.