More and more people are leaving the countryside to live in cities. Does this development have positive or negative effects on the environment?

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #7083
Question:
More and more people are leaving the countryside to live in cities. Does this development have positive or negative effects on the environment?
Answer Hints:
This is a positive or negative topic; you can choose either side to answer. However, you need to notice the "effects on the environment." All your points should focus on the environment-related points.

Positive
  • Overloaded people cause environmental issues, no matter in rural areas or cities.
  • In cities, governments have more effective management and technology to protect the environment.
  • Handling environmental issues or disasters, like polluted water, it's easier in cities.
Negative
  • The lifestyle in cities isn't environment friendly, it spends more energy than in the countryside.
  • Overloaded cities make things worse. For example, traffic jams force people to stay longer on the roads, it wastes gas and produces air pollution.
  • If cities' environmental quality becomes lower, people will leave cities in the long run. It will finally damage cities' development.
Answer 1
In developing countries, the rural population is moving to urban areas for enormous job opportunities and education resources. This tendency has more benefits as compared to its drawbacks. This essay will analyze the merits and demits in the following paragraphs with relevant examples.
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By Paluo Han, 2022-08-01  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 317
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The prompt is not fully addressed,The topic is the "effects on the environment". The essay doesn't focus on the environment, so cannot get a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-There is a wide range of vocabulary, used appropriately and naturally.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-A variety of complex structures is used with some flexibility and accuracy. Grammar and punctuation are well controlled.