More and more people are leaving the countryside to live in cities. Does this development have positive or negative effects on the environment?

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Question:
More and more people are leaving the countryside to live in cities. Does this development have positive or negative effects on the environment?
Answer Hints:
This is a positive or negative topic; you can choose either side to answer. However, you need to notice the "effects on the environment." All your points should focus on the environment-related points.

Positive
  • Overloaded people cause environmental issues, no matter in rural areas or cities.
  • In cities, governments have more effective management and technology to protect the environment.
  • Handling environmental issues or disasters, like polluted water, it's easier in cities.
Negative
  • The lifestyle in cities isn't environment friendly, it spends more energy than in the countryside.
  • Overloaded cities make things worse. For example, traffic jams force people to stay longer on the roads, it wastes gas and produces air pollution.
  • If cities' environmental quality becomes lower, people will leave cities in the long run. It will finally damage cities' development.
Answer 1
In developing countries, the rural population moves to urban areas for enormous job opportunities and education resources...

There are myriad advantages to the relocation of people to the city center. First and foremost, many folks migrate to cities for better employment...

Nevertheless, it has had some negative consequences over the period. At first, cities will be overcrowded...

In conclusion, after discussing the above, I believe that despite some disadvantages, it has many positive benefits...
Band: 6.5
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All Words31216653%
Top 300 Words154 (49%)51 (30%)33%
300 - 1000 Words46 (14%)31 (18%)67%
Over 1000 Words112 (35%)84 (50%)75%
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Link Words: 22 (including link phrase: 5)
Sentences: Number: 17; Average Length: 113 characters; Words/Sentence: 18
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has and(8), will(7), there(7), for(6), more(6), areas(4), can(4); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Task Response:
-The prompt is not fully addressed; the topic is the 'effects on the environment.' The essay doesn't focus on the environment, so it cannot get a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-A wide range of vocabulary is used appropriately and naturally.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-A variety of complex structures is used with some flexibility and accuracy. Grammar and punctuation are well controlled.