Despite better access to education, many adults today still can not read or write. In what ways are they disadvantaged? What can governments do to help them?

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Question:
Despite better access to education, many adults today still can not read or write. In what ways are they disadvantaged? What can governments do to help them?
Answer Hints:
Your answer should have two parts: the disadvantages and governments' solutions. In the solution part, you should exclude education because the question mentioned 'despite better access to education.'

Disadvantages
  • Lack of ability to get new information effectively.
  • Not easy to get a good or high-salary job.
  • Are excluded from many social activities. difficult to change adverse circumstances.
Solutions
  • Add education facilities. (The question already mentioned it.)
  • Offer multiple channels, like video or audio, to spread information.
  • Protect their fundamental rights, and avoid people looking down on them.
  • Handle the root causes of illiteracy for individual cases, e.g., poverty or disease.
Answer 1
Adults who cannot read or write are disadvantaged in today's society. The inability to read or write makes it challenging for them to improve their economic and social standing. There are many things government can do to help them.
One of the most significant disadvantages of illiteracy is the limited job ...
By Wujuny Doors, 2023-04-13  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 293
Band: 7.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-Ideas relating to each sector mentioned in the prompt are presented, but there is not much development of some.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is logical, and there is a clear central topic to each paragraph.
Lexical Resources:
-There is a wide range of vocabulary, used appropriately and naturally. But a few sentences are wordy to show grammar or vocabulary skills.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-A variety of complex structures is used with some flexibility and accuracy.