Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think it is important for them to go to school

IELTS Writing Task 2 & Answer

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 IELTS General Essay Answers - #4001
Question:
Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think it is important for them to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.
Answer 1
Home education and learning are gaining huge popularity for children. While some people acknowledge that home learning is beneficial for children's growth, I would like to argue that teaching children at schools offers more merits.
On the one hand, e-learning has opened new portals for children to learn at home, ...
By Pushpraj, 2021-01-25  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 282
Band: 7
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a clear position is presented throughout the response.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-There is a clear overall progression in the response, but somewhat mechanically, with occasional errors.
Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, and although there are a few spelling errors.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but there are a few errors in grammatical control.
Answer 2
Nowadays It is a controversial debate topic that children should be educated at home or in school. As both ways have their merits in the development of a child, the essay will delve into both sides in deep.
Considering the former one, people think this way because teachers cannot focus on each child in the classroom ...
By vaimik, 2020-11-21  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 272
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are relevant, but some are insufficiently developed.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-There is a clear overall progression in the response, but somewhat mechanically, with occasional errors.
Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is quite wide and shows awareness of collocation, but a higher band needs stronger vocabulary skill.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and although errors occur, they rarely reduce communication.
Answer 3
A few individuals claim that the best learning environment for children is at home, while others' opinions say that sending them to school is essential. This issue concern most parents. I hope this essay will help them decide what learning environment they will provide for their children by citing opinions on the ...
By nam, 2021-03-08  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 275
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are relevant, but some are insufficiently developed, such as the concept "teaching children at home."
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident and cohesive devices are used, though rather mechanically.
Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is quite wide and shows awareness of collocation.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but there are a few errors in grammatical control.
Answer 4
Education creates the future of all human beings, especially for children. However, the ways or methods of education are various. Some prefer educating students at home while...
By Aqueela Mansuri, 2018-02-03  View full answer
Total words: 263
Band: NA
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
Answer 5
The argument over whether learning at home or at school is better for children has not been settled yet. Whereas home education offers better protection with individual learning...
By Jade Lee, 2017-10-17  View full answer
Total words: 268
Band: NA
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest to refine coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.