In many countries, it is now illegal to smoke in public places

IELTS Writing Task 2 & Answer

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 IELTS General Essay Answers - #4004
Question:
In many countries, it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is unfair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. Do you agree or disagree?
Answer 1
More and more countries have resulted regulations to protect citizens from hazard of smoking. In my experiences, if a person wants to smoke, he or she should isolate second...
By Akba Rise, 2018-02-03  View full answer
Total words: 302
Band: NA
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • Paragraph 3 is relatively short, enrich it.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest to use a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
Answer 2
The issue of smoking and smoking bans is an emotive one because smokers and non-smokers both tend to hold strong views about their rights. Many countries have now chosen to ban...
By Jade Lee, 2017-09-26  View full answer
Total words: 309
Band: NA
  • The conclusion is wordy, suggest to simplify it.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(12) HAVE(9) SMOKING(7); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • Suggest to use a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Suggest to refine coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.