Since the 18th-century technological advances have replaced people in the workplace, technology is increasingly responsible for unemployment. Do you agree or disagree?

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Since the 18th century, technological advances have replaced people in the workplace. With today's technology, this process is happening at a greater rate. Technology is increasingly responsible for unemployment. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
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Agree or disagree question. You can choose either side, but "agree" is easier to write.

Agree
  • Technology improves productivity, especially for simple laboring.
  • Machines have high reliability and never strike.
  • Employers use machines instead of human resources to save costs.
  • Workers' skills and experiences aren't crucial as in old times because of technological advances.
Disagree
  • Technology advances are made by people too; it creates new employment chances.
  • Technology advances also create new fields and markets that bring new industries, like web development, which offer new job chances.
Answer 1
Modern technology is improving our everyday lives, although it also causes new issues. Some in old industries may lose their jobs because of robots or other auto tools...

Unemployment in the 21st century is far higher than it was a couple of decades ago. Inventors work hard to develop new machines and robots...

Machines have considerably improved our standard of living. They haven't killed jobs. Actually, it is safe to claim that new technologies have created new professions...

Fewer laborers mean fewer costs and lower final product prices. The number of advantages is far higher than the disadvantages...
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Answer 2
Technological advances always have an impact on people at work. Sometimes, it can mean that people are no longer necessary in their jobs, but sometimes, they make people work easier...

In my view, technology really began to affect the industry in the early 20th century. The result was that specific industries, like the car industry, did not need as many people, as automated machines and robots could do jobs such as painting the car or putting the car together...

However, in my opinion, if we now look at the effect of high technology on the workplace, there has been a different effect...

In conclusion, technology has resulted in unemployment in some traditional industries, like the car industry...
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