Some children from the age of 11 or 13 go to schools to learn more practical skills that will help them get a job in some countries

IELTS Writing Task 2 & Answer

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 IELTS General Essay Answers - #4018
Question:
Some children from the age of 11 or 13 go to schools to learn more practical skills that will help them get a job in some countries. Other children stay in schools that provide a more general academic education. What should schools do to prepare students for future work?
Answer 1
We cannot use same ruler to measure all stuffs. When we talk about diversity, no one disagree that young kids are so different among each other. General academic education isn't...
By Jayita Ment, 2018-01-21  View full answer
Total words: 296
Band: NA
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 3 as start point.
  • Suggest to use a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
Answer 2
We live in a changing world, one that needs adaptable students who are ready to deal with the challenges of the communications age. However, we must not overlook the fact that...
By Jiabao Lam, 2017-10-01  View full answer
Total words: 294
Band: NA
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has THEY(9) NOT(5) CHILDREN(5); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest to use a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Conclusion seems too plain, try to polish it.