Modern technology is changing our world. It has advantages such as bringing people closer together through communication; it also has disadvantages such as destroying the differences between cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this ...

IELTS Writing Task 2 & Answer

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 IELTS General Essay Answers - #4019
Question:
Modern technology is changing our world. It has advantages such as bringing people closer together through communication; it also has disadvantages such as destroying the differences between cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Answer 1
It has always been debated whether improvement in technology is beneficial for humankind or leads to considerable demerits. Although the advancement in technology is certainly contributing to effective communication worldwide, it is responsible for mitigating one culture's uniqueness. I strongly agree with the above ...
By pushp, 2021-01-29  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 349
Band: 7.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a clear position is presented throughout the response.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is logical, and there is a clear central topic to each paragraph.
Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, and although there are a few spelling errors.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a wide range of structures, these are used flexibly; however, there are occasional errors, like punctuation and capitalization.
Answer 2
Modern technology has changed the ways that people communicate with each other. And we have to accept even more new methods that potentially let people closer and downsize the...
By Lubna Ment, 2018-01-21  View full answer
Total words: 281
Band: NA
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(11) PEOPLE(8) WITH(8); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest to use a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Paragraph 2 seems too plain, try to polish it.
Answer 3
Modern technology with its advantages and disadvantages has changed today’s world enormously. Communication allows people all over the world to stay in contact with each other....
By Jiabao Lam, 2017-10-01  View full answer
Total words: 256
Band: NA
  • The introduction seems long, refine sentences.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.