In many countries, the crime level is increasing, and crimes are becoming more violent

IELTS Writing Task 2 & Answer

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 IELTS General Essay Answers - #4021
Question:
In many countries, the crime level is increasing, and crimes are becoming more violent. What is the reason and what can be done about it?
Answer 1
Crime isn't new of modern society and no one knows when it actually started. The sad fact is that crime rate is increasing in recent decades, and killing, stealing, robbing,...
By Abdullah Hassan, 2017-12-03  View full answer
Total words: 262
Band: NA
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest to use a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Suggest to refine coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
Answer 2
It is true that the crime rate is increasing in many areas of the world. Many governments react to this problem by building prisons to contain the criminals. This has proved so...
By Jiabao Lam, 2017-10-01  View full answer
Total words: 287
Band: NA
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has THAT(8) AND(8) THIS(6); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • Suggest to use a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.