Today, more people are overweight than ever before

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Question:
Today, more people are overweight than ever before. In your opinion, what are the primary causes of this? What measures to overcome this epidemic?
Answer 1
Nowadays the number of overweight people is constantly increasing. This essay will discuss the main reasons for this epidemic and then describe the possible effects of the problem...

In my opinion, the foremost causes of obesity are inactive lifestyle and unhealthy eating habits. Today, more and more people rely on cars instead of walking, have fewer physical demands at work, and prefer idle leisure activities...

The possible effects of this problem include physical health problems and loss of productivity. First of all, obesity results in incorrect functioning of the human body and contributes to the risk of developing some chronic illnesses...

To sum up, obesity is a big problem that affects a lot of people nowadays. Inactive lifestyles and eating disorders result in severe health problems, and loss of productivity mainly causes it...
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Link Words: 16 (including link phrase: 0)
Sentences: Number: 15; Average Length: 105 characters; Words/Sentence: 16
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