Some people think that spending a lot on holding wedding parties, birthday parties, and other celebrations is just a waste of money

IELTS Writing Task 2 & Answer

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 IELTS General Essay Answers - #4038
Question:
Some people think that spending a lot on holding wedding parties, birthday parties, and other celebrations is just a waste of money. Others think that these are necessary for individuals and society. Discuss both views, and give your opinion.
Answer 1
Throwing parties can be expensive. While some people do not find these fancy parties worth what they cost, others believe parties are important to both individuals and the...
By Ryan Higgins, 2017-10-03  View full answer
Total words: 283
Band: 8
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest to use a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
Answer 2
Some people like to celebrate any special days by parties, like birthday and marriage. Is it just to waste money and no any merits? The discussion is a debatable topic for a...
By Mohammad Zuhr, 2017-11-11  View full answer
Total words: 300
Band: NA
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has PEOPLE(7) AND(7) MONEY(6); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Suggest to use a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Paragraph 2 seems too plain, try to polish it.