In some countries, children have very strict rules of behavior; in other countries, they can do almost anything they like
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In some countries, children have very strict rules of behavior; in other countries, they can do almost anything they like. To what extent should children have to follow the rules?
In some countries, children have very strict rules of behavior; in other countries, they can do almost anything they like. To what extent should children have to follow the rules?
Answer 1
Children's education relies on country and culture. While some prefer encouraging kids to express their freedom, some believe strict rules can help kids learn fast...
Children are impressionable and quickly adopt and mold as they are taught. Some believe that if children are disciplined at a tender age, they subconsciously assume the same qualities even in later stages of life...
On the other hand, there are cons to such stern laws. A child may not be able to express his opinion and eventually would lose his freedom of thought and right to live his life...
Though each style has been proven effective and ridiculous, there is no comprehensive solution. I believe a blend of both techniques would benefit a child's fostering...
Children are impressionable and quickly adopt and mold as they are taught. Some believe that if children are disciplined at a tender age, they subconsciously assume the same qualities even in later stages of life...
On the other hand, there are cons to such stern laws. A child may not be able to express his opinion and eventually would lose his freedom of thought and right to live his life...
Though each style has been proven effective and ridiculous, there is no comprehensive solution. I believe a blend of both techniques would benefit a child's fostering...
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Answer 2
The extent to which children must follow the rules is very complex since children grow up in very different cultures worldwide...
Firstly, strict rules of behavior create responsible and respectful children who, in turn, mature into respectful adults...
However, forcing children to follow strict rules of behavior doesn't always yield positive results, as discussed above; most of the time, it backfires and works against society...
Rules should guide children, but these rules should not be imposed on them because, as human beings, they need to have room to develop their character traits and adopt a behavioral pattern of their own...
Firstly, strict rules of behavior create responsible and respectful children who, in turn, mature into respectful adults...
However, forcing children to follow strict rules of behavior doesn't always yield positive results, as discussed above; most of the time, it backfires and works against society...
Rules should guide children, but these rules should not be imposed on them because, as human beings, they need to have room to develop their character traits and adopt a behavioral pattern of their own...
Band: 6
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