Nowadays many young people spend their free time in shopping centers. This has a negative effect on the youths and the society.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give your opinion and relevant examples.
You should write at least 250 words.
Now many young people spend long hours in malls and shopping centers. In my opinion, although seeming as a waste of time, this phenomenon has significant boons in its favor. On...
By Hethehe Real , 2017-11-05
Band: NA (Total words: 276)
- High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
The young people today spend a large amount of their leisure time in shopping centers. It is feared that this trend can bring negative influences on the youths and the society....
By Jiabao Lam, 2017-10-03
Band: NA (Total words: 320)
- The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
- High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
- Suggest to use a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.