Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers; others believe that homework plays an important role in children's education

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Question:
Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers; others believe that homework plays an important role in children's education. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.
Answer 1
Homework helps students better understand their study materials and class lessons, and regular homework attaches students to their academic lessons more deeply...

On the one side, daily homework brings many benefits. As I already mentioned, it helps students understand subjects more deeply...

On the other side, daily homework can bring many disadvantages. For instance, if a person has no interest in biology but has a vast interest in music, he has to spend his precious time doing his homework and reading uninteresting books instead of practicing new melodies...

To sum up, I think that an intermediate position can be taken. For example, a student will have to do his daily homework if he will specialize in this field...
Band: 6.5
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Answer 2
In this contemporary era, education plays a pivotal role in the development of pupils. Most of the teachers now give homework to students daily...

From a positive perspective, it is better to give assignments at home as students can also spend some time on their studies at home, which helps them memorize everything better...

Conversely, it should not be enough to pressure the students. It should involve work pupils enjoy and don't feel dull, such as making posters or models related to their studies and collecting pictures...

To conclude, although homework is noteworthy for students' involvement in their studies, it should not be enough to influence their freedom to play as it is also vital for students...
Band: 5.5
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Top 300 Words120 (55%)46 (42%)38%
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Over 1000 Words60 (27%)44 (40%)73%
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Link Words: 19 (including link phrase: 1)
Sentences: Number: 11; Average Length: 115 characters; Words/Sentence: 19
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-The essay is less than 250, doesn't match the basic criteria.
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has their(9), students(7), homework(6), not(6), should(5), more(5), and(5); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
-Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is limited, but just about adequate for the task, try to enhance IELTS vocabulary.
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Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms.