IELTS General Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, others believe that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

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 IELTS General Essay Answers - #4200103
TOPIC: Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, others believe that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.
Answer 1
People are divided into the opinion of whether a teacher should give school homework to children. Some people argue that home is a crucial part of the education system, whereas opponents ponder that it is burgeoning the burden of the student. Although according to my perspective, teacher should complete the syllabus in ...
By jarry, 2020-03-26  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 434
AI Comment:
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has SCHOOL(12) THAT(10) THEY(10); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 2 as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 0.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6.5
The essay is good except the ending. You should return to your view by a powerful conclusion.