TOPIC: Some people prefer to work the same type of job throughout their lifetime while others like to change the type of job they do. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
People are divided into the opinions whether pursuing a single job during the whole life, whereas opponents argue that quit their job according to requirements and needs. In my opinion, people should do change their jobs after a few years. It is fruitful for both employees and employers. I will not only elaborate on ...
Total words: 471
- The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
- The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
- You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has JOB(16) LIFE(12) THEIR(12); try to decrease duplicated words.
- High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
- Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
- Obvious Grammar Errors: 6>.
Excellent writing upon a difficult topic, but seems longer than expected.