IELTS General Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Many companies and organizations require their employees to wear uniform. What kind of jobs require uniforms? What are the disadvantages of wearing a uniform to work?

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TOPIC: Many companies and organizations require their employees to wear uniform. What kind of jobs require uniforms? What are the disadvantages of wearing a uniform to work?
Answer 1
Traditionally uniforms symbolise the unity of a party. It is commonly seen that people in specific positions wears uniform. This essay will introduce the occupations that need wearing the specific workwear as well as discuss some of the limitations related to uniforms.
Jobs involved in the secondary and tertiary ...
By Rachel, 2020-03-31  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 258
AI Comment:
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • Paragraph 3 is relatively short, enrich it.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 5.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
It gives a good answer to this question with few errors. Both logic and grammar are ok; you should have time to enhance the conclusion.
Answer 2
The uniform is a symbol of equality and eradicates the discrimination between the individuals, so that the trend of uniform is burgeoning. Some people advocate that it is a positive development for folks; however, others condemn the statement. Although more prose of wearing a uniform for people, we cannot deny some ...
By jarry, 2020-04-06  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 461
AI Comment:
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(16) UNIFORM(14) PEOPLE(11); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Paragraph 3 seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 0.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6.5
Uniform doesn't mean equality, especially in the army and police. The logic should be refined. Anyway, it's a difficult question to write.
Answer 3
These days, a lot of profit and non-profit organizations provide their workers to wear a uniform. Wearing a uniform at work has some benefits and drawbacks, but in my personal opinion, I think the advantages of wearing a work uniform outweighed the disadvantages.
To begin with, some people think that when companies ...
By singh, 2020-04-03  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 263
AI Comment:
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(8) THEIR(8) FOR(7); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 5.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
Good essay, short but fluent in both reasoning and syntax. Try to enrich it, you have a chance to get a higher mark.
Answer 4
In many businesses today, it is compulsory for workers to wear a uniform. This essay will discuss the types of jobs that need workers to wear uniforms and bring to light the shortcoming of being forced to wear uniforms to work.
You have two main types of jobs that require their worker to wear uniform. That being ...
By Dose, 2020-06-02  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 361
AI Comment:
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • You had better rewrite the essay to 4 or 5 paragraphs.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has UNIFORM(10) AND(9) WEAR(8); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 5.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
The essay answered the question fine. You may polish it more like an academic essay. For example, not use "you" as a subject, "this" as a connection pronoun.
Answer 5
In modern times, numerous sectors want their workers to wear a uniform. Nowadays, there are many Jobs related to a particular type of services like security guards or maids require a uniform. However, there are plenty of disadvantages of wearing a uniform at work such as staff can feel boring to wear the same dress ...
By Shona, 2020-05-30  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 318
AI Comment:
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has THEIR(9) UNIFORM(7) WEAR(6); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 2 as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 4.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
Logic and grammar are good, but not very persuasive, vocabulary needs to enhance too.
Answer 6
These days, it has become a debatable issue that the business corporations and organizations are demanding their staff to attire uniforms while coming to work. While wearing a homogeneous dress has many positives, its negative should not be underestimated. In this essay will discuss the disadvantages outweigh the ...
By Gurpreet singh, 2020-05-07  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 313
AI Comment:
  • Paragraph 3 is relatively short, enrich it.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 8.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5
The logic and reasoning need to be improved. The essay didn't touch the key to the problem, especially "material" shouldn't be a part of the essay.