IELTS General Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Many companies and organisations require their employees to wear uniform. What kind of jobs require uniforms? What are the disadvantages of wearing uniform to work?

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TOPIC: Many companies and organisations require their employees to wear uniform. What kind of jobs require uniforms? What are the disadvantages of wearing uniform to work?
Answer 1
Traditionally uniforms symbolise the unity of a party. It is commonly seen that people in specific positions wears uniform. This essay will introduce the occupations that need wearing the specific workwear as well as discuss some of the limitations related to uniforms.
Jobs involved in the secondary and tertiary ...
By Rachel, 2020-03-31  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 258
AI Comment:
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • Paragraph 3 is relatively short, enrich it.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 5.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
It gives a good answer to this question with few errors. Both logic and grammar are ok; you should have time to enhance the conclusion.
Answer 2
The uniform is a symbol of equality and eradicates the discrimination between the individuals, so that the trend of uniform is burgeoning. Some people advocate that it is a positive development for folks; however, others condemn the statement. Although more prose of wearing a uniform for people, we cannot deny some ...
By jarry, 2020-04-06  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 461
AI Comment:
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(16) UNIFORM(14) PEOPLE(11); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Paragraph 3 seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 0.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6.5
Uniform doesn't mean equality, especially in the army and police. The logic should be refined. Anyway, it's a difficult question to write.
Answer 3
These days, a lot of profit and non-profit organizations provide their workers to wear a uniform. Wearing a uniform at work has some benefits and drawbacks, but in my personal opinion, I think the advantages of wearing a work uniform outweighed the disadvantages.
To begin with, some people think that when companies ...
By singh, 2020-04-03  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 263
AI Comment:
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(8) THEIR(8) FOR(7); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 5.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
Good essay, short but fluent in both reasoning and syntax. Try to enrich it, you have a chance to get a higher mark.