IELTS General Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Some people prefer one-on-one lessons, while others like groups. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

 Actions
 IELTS General Essay Answers - #4200428
TOPIC: Some people prefer one-on-one lessons, while others like groups. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Answer 1
Despite a school of thought which believes that private tutoring is advantageous, others, however, are of the perception that group learning would be beneficial. This essay will examine both these aspects and will argue why studying in a group is meritorious.
To open the deliberation with the former's point of view, ...
By Pratusha, 2020-05-16  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 347
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 5.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
Not easy to understand on both grammar and vocabulary. IELTS writing needs to use plain and precise language to express your idea. You need to rephrase some complicated sentences.
Answer 2
Over the past decade, technology has developed the approach of education in every form. With advent internet, the study module has changed drastically; few individuals choose for private tutors while the excess likes to go for group tuition. As per my speculation person to person studies are more productive, and troop ...
By Diksha Kedare , 2020-05-19  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 330
AI Comment:
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has FOR(10) AND(9) ARE(7); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 3.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
Language skills are good, but you changed the question. The "one-on-one lesson" isn't an internet lesson. The topic doesn't matter about technology.
Answer 3
It is preferable for some persons to study together; others, however, prefer being alone with their tutor. This essay will discuss both views and give my opinion.
Undoubtedly, studying one-on-one produces good results as the tutor usually focuses on one participant. Firstly, studying alone with a teacher tends ...
By Joyce, 2020-05-17  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 268
AI Comment:
  • The introduction isn't strong enough, suggest to enhance it.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 4.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
Your introduction is too simple; besides, "one-on-one lesson" isn't a private tutor or homeschool. You should catch the question more precisely.