IELTS General Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Some people believe that learning science is necessary for everyone, others disagree. Discuss both views and mention your opinion.

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 IELTS General Essay Answers - #4200529
Question:
Some people believe that learning science is necessary for everyone, others disagree. Discuss both views and mention your opinion.
Answer 1
Science is one of the oldest and most important academic disciplines of the world and covers various subjects. While some people claim that science education should be mandated, many argue otherwise. This essay shall debate both viewpoints and form a conclusion.
Science helps our understanding of the world around ...
By AD, 2020-09-14  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 263
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-You should present views from two sides by the question equally, then plus your position.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Some sentences are wordy, "it is not everyone's cup of tea" shouldn't be IELTS writing.
Lexical Resources:
-The essay didn't use less common vocabulary with accuracy.
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Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and although errors occur, they rarely reduce communication.
Answer 2
Education has an important role in everyone's life. Some people think that it is mandatory to study science, while others argue that it is not essential. Like any debate, it is imperative to examine both sides of the view.
On the one hand, science has a predominant role in people's lives. To begin with, it is ...
By Divz, 2020-07-19  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 265
Band: 5.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The logic and reasoning look good, but some sentences seem wordy and not in the style that academic writing should be in. E.g, shouldn't use "you."
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident, with some simple cohesive devices, but sometimes used inaccurately.
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Answer 3
With the advent of globalization, science starts to play a key role in children's education. While school authorities claim that science-related subjects should be mandatory in both primary and second educations, students believe that is unnecessary, and it will waste their time. This essay will consider both ...
By Farhad, 2020-09-01  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 261
Band: 5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The prompt is not fully addressed, there is an attempt to discuss two views, but ideas are limited and not clear, 2nd and 3rd should be re-structured.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident; however, the answer lacks contextualization, and cohesion within sentences is sometimes faulty.
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Lexical Resources:
-Some spelling errors are noted; the essay's vocabulary is too plain.
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Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Some grammatical errors, such as article (a, an, the).
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