IELTS General Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Some people prefer to relax by doing physical activities, while others choose mental activities (crosswords, chess, etc.). Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Question:
Some people prefer to relax by doing physical activities, while others choose mental activities (crosswords, chess, etc.). Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Answer 1
People have divided into the opinion whether physical exercises are a more significant way to relax and calm, while opponents believe that mental exercises such as chess, crosswords. I think both are important ways to keep calm. It is the onus of people who would like to choose.
Undoubtedly, the major benefit of ...
By jarry, 2020-06-12  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 407
Band: 7
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Excellent essay, please notice to overcome tiny grammar issues. The essay still has room to shrink wordy sentences.
Answer 2
Relaxation is necessary for an individual that mainly improves their minds' physical and mental status. Different people think differently about spending a relaxing time. While some mostly do physical activities such as exercise, others consider mental activities such as chess or crosswords as the best. I believe both ...
By Anoop KM, 2020-06-13  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 348
Band: 7
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Excellent essay, please notice to overcome tiny grammar issues. In the conclusion "children" shouldn't be mentioned.
Answer 3
It is widely acknowledged that relaxation is vital for a healthy body, mind and soul. Many choose to have hobbies, which composed of physical and mental stimulations, to unwind from their busy work life. I strongly believe that both activities are very pleasurable and cannot be omitted in combatting a stressful ...
By mushroom, 2020-06-13  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 307
Band: 6.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Excellent essay, but not sufficient on "Discuss both views." You may drop the last paragraph, and rephrase the second paragraph to two paragraphs.
Answer 4
Humans, the recognized social animals, satisfy themselves by doing different types of activities. Some people believe in physical activities. Others, however, believe in mental activities. In this essay, I will discuss both; nevertheless, I am more inclined towards mental activities than a physical one.
In this ...
By Nisarg, 2020-10-19  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 297
Band: 6.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generlly arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Use a variety of complex structures, but have some grammatical errors, such as article (a, an, the).
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Answer 5
Due to day to day work activities such as unending office works or house chores, mostly all the humans are in search of one or the other activities to distress. Many like to sweat it out by involving themselves in physical activities such as playing outdoor games like football, cricket, volleyball, etc. or physical ...
By Mariam, 2020-06-10  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 265
Band: 5.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
The response and logic are ok. You may divide the second paragraph into two for physical and mental activities respectively. Besides, the introduction is a little wordy.
Answer 6
In today's fast-paced world, people are struggling to get a balance between work and social life. The time to relax is minimal. However, people still try their best to take out a little time out of their busy schedules for physical or recreational activities in order to refresh their minds. Both physical and mental ...
By ARay, 2020-06-12  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 263
Band: 5.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
The essay answered the question well. But your grammar skills need to be enhanced. E.g., the first sentence in the original version is wrong, "In today's fast paced world where people are struggling to get a balance between work and social life."
Answer 7
Relaxation is a crucial aspect of a healthy lifestyle. Everyone chooses their own paths to relax. Some people are physically active to relax; others, notwithstanding, prefer mental activities. In the following paragraphs, I will illustrate both the views; however, in my opinion, I highly believe that both the ...
By moksh, 2020-10-19  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 281
Band: 5.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident and cohesive devices are used, though rather mechanically.
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Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is limited, but just about adequate for the task, try to enhance IELTS vocabulary.
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Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There are attempts to produce complex structures, but these usually contain errors.
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Answer 8
Relaxing is vital as it helps us to ease and makes us comfortable, but there are different ways by which we can relax. Some choose to do so by doing physical activities, while others prefer to do the mental task. Both of these methods have their advantages. I choose to do so by doing yoga and light exercise ...
By bikas pandey, 2020-06-12  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 292
Band: 5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
The original version has too many grammar errors, which hurt your score. Besides, the question is ask WHY some "prefer" or "choose", the essay doesn't focus on it.
Answer 9
Relaxation is a must for all beings; both men and women in this challenging word work for at least 8 hours a day to earn their living. So they deserve a break now and then to keep things going. In this essay, we will discuss the types of relaxations and identify which fits where.
Relaxation can vaguely be ...
By Sam, 2020-06-11  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 301
Band: 5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
The essay didn't answer the question. "both men and women in this challenging word work" is too far from the question. The question is about "why", the answer is about "what." Raters have reason to believe this is a re-memoried answer.