IELTS General Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: In the past, people used to get information from books. These days more and more people get it from the internet. Give reasons for your opinion and include any relevant examples.

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 IELTS General Essay Answers - #4200603
TOPIC: In the past, people used to get information from books. These days more and more people get it from the internet. Give reasons for your opinion and include any relevant examples.
Answer 1
Although it was a habit that people relied on trusted books to acquire new knowledge, nowadays, it has become more common to browse the internet to reach any information. In my opinion, this development has been followed because getting information on the internet is easier and faster.
The main reason why people ...
By Menna, 2020-07-13  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 288
AI Comment:
  • The introduction isn't strong enough, suggest to enhance it.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has INFORMATION(9) PEOPLE(7) INTERNET(7); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 3 as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 4.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
The response is good in both logic and structure, but has some tiny syntax defects.
Answer 2
In this fast-paced world, news and information were thrown to us in every second. We can easily get information from the other end of the world in just the blink of an eye. We were so used to the fast-paced networking; we seldom sit and read to find an answer about anything since we have all sort of search engine to ...
By Tt, 2020-06-16  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 261
AI Comment:
  • The introduction seems long, refine sentences.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has INFORMATION(10) INTERNET(8) FROM(7); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Conclusion seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 2.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
The response isn't matched with the question very well. You should try to give reasons and relevant examples to support the topic. Besides, the essay's vocabulary is too pale.
Answer 3
Since the revolution of the internet, there are myriad things like books and magazines that have dwindled as compared to the past. While I agree that the ease of access and globalization had mandate people to use the internet for everything, it goes without the internet is detrimental in many ways and yet to reach all ...
By AK, 2020-07-11  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 280
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 5.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5
The response is ok in both logic and structure, but language skills need to be enhanced, especially you have too many wordy and wrong sentences.
Answer 4
Although books were the main source of information in the past, with the advent of modern technologies, people's preferences have changed dramatically, and nowadays, online resources are in more demand than paper books. It is due to the easy access to Internet resources and outdated information in the majority of ...
By Farhad, 2020-09-06  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 302
AI Comment:
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(11) BOOKS(8) INFORMATION(7); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 3.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
Task Response:
-The logic and reasoning look good, but some sentences seem wordy.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The response is organized into paragraphs, but the focus of each is not always clear.
Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is limited, it's a big shortage in the task, try to enhance IELTS vocabulary.
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