IELTS General Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Some people think that teenagers should be requested an unpaid job in their free time. They believe that these will be helpful both individual teenagers and local communities. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons to your answer, and require examples.

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 IELTS General Essay Answers - #4200611
TOPIC: Some people think that teenagers should be requested an unpaid job in their free time. They believe that these will be helpful both individual teenagers and local communities. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons to your answer, and require examples.
Answer 1
I agree that having a job is a rewarding way for teenagers to spend their free time and also a great way to strengthen local communities. However, I believe it would be more advantageous for both teenagers and communities if the job comes with a salary.
First and foremost, teenagers need motivation more than ...
By hm, 2020-06-17  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 288
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 2.
Tutor Comment:
Band 7
Excellent essay, if having examples, it should get a higher score.