TOPIC: Some people think that teenagers should be requested an unpaid job in their free time. They believe that these will be helpful for both individual teenagers and local communities. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons to your answer, and require examples.
I agree that having a job is a rewarding way for teenagers to spend their free time and also a great way to strengthen local communities. However, I believe it would be more advantageous for both teenagers and communities if the job comes with a salary.
First and foremost, teenagers need motivation more than ...
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Excellent essay, if having examples, it should get a higher score.